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Prologue
Silvers don’t mingle with Reds. Ever. They just don't get along. Reds tell stories of Silvers, making them seem like monsters.
Silvers make Reds seem like rodents. Idiotic creatures that are a waste of space.
This story features a special Red, and his legacy of lies.
How ironic.
Silvers don’t mingle with Reds. Ever. They just don't get along. Reds tell stories of Silvers, making them seem like monsters.
Silvers make Reds seem like rodents. Idiotic creatures that are a waste of space.
This story features a special Red, and his legacy of lies.
How ironic.
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He who robs the name of the demon, Conjuring them the divinity within a moment, Don't deny the power of the master, For all the fate he can alter, Dance to the words of the robber, While he admires his work in front of the altar. In his hand is the Spear, For those who see will fear.
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After the Night
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You keep silent during dinner and afterwards and soon after climb the ladder to the bed directly under the roof. You can't say it's comfortable and the corpses surely don't help to make a homely atmosphere, but despite that you find yourself so exhausted that you slip into a deep slumber.
To your own surprise you are still alive the next day.
The man the hut belongs to nods at you as you descend the ladder and wishes you farewell.
"You know... I'm sure you're dy
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Fear
what do i fear? I fear my life ending with a fade not a bang. I fear ending in a hospital bed forgotten. The only face i see the indifferent nurse bringing food, everything in view sterile and bland. No one to sit with me as i pass into whats next. A funeral attended by only the priest and the man with a shovel. I fear my second death coming before the the first
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Hi, I am Vern from Project Comment I am critiquing your work for More Exposure #27
Here is your critique.
Overview - There are two races and they are called Reds and Silvers. Both races view the other as sub-"human". They do not view each other as different races but as something to be reviled. The prologue says that the two races just don't get along. The story will concern an unsavory person of the Red race. I chose to critique this work because I don't get to critique written works that much and I consider myself primarily a writer. So it is a great honor to critique one of my own.
Prologue - The prologue is very short less than a paragraph and there are important things that you left out: Are Reds and Silvers different sub-races of the same race or are they vastly different like Red Martians and Green Martians in the Barsoom series of Edgar Rice Burroughs? If they are radically different species it is more understandable that they hate each other. Also, Is this a fantasy story, science fiction, Horror, or some other genre? What planet, plane, or dimension are they on? You should have answered those questions. Still, it is a great start.
Conclusion - You clearly have talent and I wish you a long and successful career. It was a pleasure critiquing you. Have a great day.
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Here is your critique.
Overview - There are two races and they are called Reds and Silvers. Both races view the other as sub-"human". They do not view each other as different races but as something to be reviled. The prologue says that the two races just don't get along. The story will concern an unsavory person of the Red race. I chose to critique this work because I don't get to critique written works that much and I consider myself primarily a writer. So it is a great honor to critique one of my own.
Prologue - The prologue is very short less than a paragraph and there are important things that you left out: Are Reds and Silvers different sub-races of the same race or are they vastly different like Red Martians and Green Martians in the Barsoom series of Edgar Rice Burroughs? If they are radically different species it is more understandable that they hate each other. Also, Is this a fantasy story, science fiction, Horror, or some other genre? What planet, plane, or dimension are they on? You should have answered those questions. Still, it is a great start.
Conclusion - You clearly have talent and I wish you a long and successful career. It was a pleasure critiquing you. Have a great day.